I enjoyed this, tbh. I feel in some areas you were a little redundant, but at the same time, the visuals/imagery were nice as if I can visualize the character and his emotions. Needless to say, pretty decent piece here @
Witty. So props. Keep writing.
Quote:
When it's too hard to remember shit, you're too scarred to reminisce
You have two hearts, cut in two parts by the truth's shards of shattered bliss
Every day of the week when I awake from a sleep, I'm a different person
It's like, each day is a scene and far away in my dreams I'm just rehearsing
|
My favorite bars out of the entire piece. Also, felt in certain areas you could have did a little better with your inner flow and matched your syllables a little better as some just seemed like filler just to match the rhyme. Overall as I stated, pretty decent piece, sir.