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Mike Wrecka · 03-30-2014, 09:29 PM

sick battle. classic. my bad for the brief vote. you guys deserve better but oh well

PB = blew my mind tbh. this piece was exactly what I was looking for this week. I don't know why but im getting tired of heavy plot driven storylines. the flow was immaculate. some lines made me say fuck why have never used these word combinations before. which is a huge compliment

it’s sanguine with an open wound. standing agape with awe.
so native. i want to capture each of you in a masonry jar.

this was clever. it was creative and could have gone horribly wrong in the hands of someone else but you made it subtle. which is what was needed.

sensational. live life tonally. it can be so tonal, your cause.
there’s so many openings. and i just chose to withdraw.

that's deep. you are going cerebral with this piece and im loving it

those who might frown upon, and such. i wish i could clutch
the very air i’m breathing right now, with my eyelids shut.
right as im typing this. to feel its quality. to let seconds slow
for one whole year, sigh, let it go
then sit here for another and listen to the echo of the arpeggio.
alas, not. i’m not the despot of a supposed fate’s dreadnought.

dope section here. this verse is relaxing me. its written in a very calm way. no rush. taking its time. it reads slowly for me

the rest was on point. the phrases were very well done. reminded me of dead man a bit. a classic topical approach and like I said before I am getting tired of stories so this was right in my wheel house.

NYC = sickness brah. your flow is dope.

In a sea of nascent souls...still quite a ways from a barcode's gauge
I mingle with others - we navigate this charcoal maze

great start. I don't know what a charcoal maze is but it sounds good.

fuck guys my bad but I have to sign off right now. ill come back and finish this vote.

overall - PB had a verse that I really enjoyed reading. like I was happy that I had the opportunity to read it. same with NYC. but one pulled me in more , ever so slightly and that was

Vote- PB

03-30-2014, 09:29 PM	#8
Mike Wrecka WOW Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,591 Battle Record: 29-25 Champed - Writing Challenge League I Rep Power: 82779338	sick battle. classic. my bad for the brief vote. you guys deserve better but oh well PB = blew my mind tbh. this piece was exactly what I was looking for this week. I don't know why but im getting tired of heavy plot driven storylines. the flow was immaculate. some lines made me say fuck why have never used these word combinations before. which is a huge compliment it’s sanguine with an open wound. standing agape with awe. so native. i want to capture each of you in a masonry jar. this was clever. it was creative and could have gone horribly wrong in the hands of someone else but you made it subtle. which is what was needed. sensational. live life tonally. it can be so tonal, your cause. there’s so many openings. and i just chose to withdraw. that's deep. you are going cerebral with this piece and im loving it those who might frown upon, and such. i wish i could clutch the very air i’m breathing right now, with my eyelids shut. right as im typing this. to feel its quality. to let seconds slow for one whole year, sigh, let it go then sit here for another and listen to the echo of the arpeggio. alas, not. i’m not the despot of a supposed fate’s dreadnought. dope section here. this verse is relaxing me. its written in a very calm way. no rush. taking its time. it reads slowly for me the rest was on point. the phrases were very well done. reminded me of dead man a bit. a classic topical approach and like I said before I am getting tired of stories so this was right in my wheel house. NYC = sickness brah. your flow is dope. In a sea of nascent souls...still quite a ways from a barcode's gauge I mingle with others - we navigate this charcoal maze great start. I don't know what a charcoal maze is but it sounds good. fuck guys my bad but I have to sign off right now. ill come back and finish this vote. overall - PB had a verse that I really enjoyed reading. like I was happy that I had the opportunity to read it. same with NYC. but one pulled me in more , ever so slightly and that was Vote- PB __________________ A.bove T.he R.est