Cake, this was dope man. Your approach isn’t nothing to celebrate, but the writing more than made up for it. The only thing I really would have to bring up would be the flow, but that was only in the beginning, just a couple of your transitions bugged me, but nevertheless it was dope man I enjoyed this a lot. “ just seeing the next wave. im not to the page turning news with tired age burnished views. I’m escapism blues.” Such a dope bar.
Totoro, lol this was awesome. The first part didn’t really transition into the second part too well, or maybe it’s just me. Aside from that a couple wording and spelling issues, this was a great read. Wasn’t too sure where it was going to go but I’m glad it came back full circle with the “nostalgia at the site of home” line at the end.
Damn after reading this, definitely going to be a hard choice, botw for sure. I read both verses a few times now over the past day or two so sorry for the lack of depth but I feel I have to give it to totoro for the more enjoyable read. Cake’s was definitely more sound and polished than nyc, but still I have to judge this by who took the better approach, and nyc killed it this week.
v.Totoro
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