This was a. Pretty even battle with one taking a direct route and the other a more abstract route. I really enjoyed your piece this week timeless, more reminiscent of your first two pieces in terms of layout and tone. Mechanically and storywise this was a very tight written piece with but a couple flaws but only nitpicking stuff so I dont need to mention them. Mike, I really liked your piece and agree with it except I just wish you would have made this a little longer. You're one of my favorite writers to read because I always know its going to be technically perfect I just think you could have used 48 lines to say what you said in whatever 24-25 lines you said it in, I just felt it lacked a bit.
With that said im goin to have to lean towards timeles in this one. I enjoyed both pieces but I enjoyed timeless' s piece a little more
Mvgt=timeless
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