Interesting match up. Both of you went with the same sort of vibe here in delivering messages in different ways. Timeless, you really packed in a lot of metaphors and it was the driving force of your piece. It set a particular tone, which you were able to sum it all up by the end. But as great as some of the meanings were in your piece, the story itself seemed out of place. For me this occurred in the second verse. The transition was fine, but that approach kind of negates what you wrote in the first part. Or vice versa. Something just seems missing in my opinion. But I can't take away from the fact you came with some good stuff, writing wise. Mike Wrecka, long time no speak. I haven't read anything from you in awhile I believe so I was expecting vintage Wrecka but only got a bit of that. Your rhyming was on point, it helped guide the piece along, but the content lacks much substance. As with your opponent, you had some good lines, I liked how you stuck to the idea of technology sort of being the culprit in connecting yet disconnecting people if that makes any sense. The ending was nice, great touch. I just would have liked more content though because it lacks much life. Idk if you decided to take this approach because of your opponent or that you didn't have the time to really put something with substance together. Maybe the topic was bland? But this was definitely not your best work, just okay.
At first read through, I was leaning towards going Mike Wreckas way, even though he took a very basic approach this week. But I read both multiple times more and honestly, both had plenty to boo about, but I feel timeless, despite the rather weird issue I'm having with his piece, he wrote just as well as Mike Wrecka, but his approach was much better, more unique.
MVGT: timeless. Good job by both competitors.
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