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timeless: it took a number of reads for me to piece together the verses cohesively. It sounds good to read, through the rhyme-laden flow and steady rhythm, but the language was dizzying and unclear for me. It felt like you were jumping in and out of perspectives a bit, too, and if it weren't for some of the anchoring comments at the end that helped me sort it out, I really would have been lost. I did like some of your metaphors in there - the mountains of success bar comes to mind - but I think you would get more mileage out of those metaphors if you anchor us with a straightforward situation first before delving into them. Overall I liked the verse, but I felt like there was more to it that I didn't have access to.

Wrecka: you sowed no mystery here, and you spoke candidly to the ills of technology and progress. although there wasn't much original thought going on, there was a ripple of humor that punctuated the authenticity and apathy of the speaker, like I could hear this on my neighbor's porch while we're all playing poker. I liked the "we need a rally cry, let me create a caption" line, made me think of memes.

Vote: I think Wrecka succeeded where timeless didn't, albeit through a less impressive display of language. If timeless simplified a little more in places, it would have made a huge difference, but as is Mike's verse just hit a little bit more. Good clash of styles.