[PancakeBrah]

Timeless -

The second verse, especially the latter half, was much better than the first. There was a lot to work through in that first verse. Dense, and obviously rhyme driven. I've had the same problem. It seemed cluttered to me. You went very metaphorical and I would have preferred a straightforward approach here. I was a bit lost, to be honest, and had to re-read your verse a few times before I felt comfortable voting. The second verse was superior, in my eyes, and your ending two lines were good. You had some minor technical issues with spelling and grammar but that doesn't take away from your verse. Just watch for it in the future as some people will think less of your verses if they have errors.

Mike Wrecka -

I liked this. Short, obviously, but well written. Although I think baselines are already flat. The flattening would be redundant. I like the converse/kinect/caption lines. Thought they were witty and well worded. The overall concept is one many people have tackled on here but you did it with your own twist. The use of 'signing off' was either clever or cliche. Not sure which it. It flowed well, though. The entire verse flowed well and had a nice pace to it.

Interesting match up. I think MW got more from less and timeless got less from more.

v/Mike Wrecka