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Old 03-29-2014, 12:20 PM   #5
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I felt both pieces had very strong elements and ended a tad melodramatically. Timeless you had some great lines in there like the James and the peach line, the whole piece about a brooding child being the pulse for an overarching theme of life's variety and blessings/curses created a nice micro/macro push pull. MW your piece about the decline of the human condition as a result of technology and your will to escape it as it controls you was also dope. It was a short piece and I feel like you could have put more effort into it, fleshed it out a bit more and killed it. Thanks for writing.

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