Best league ever....
No good....great piece. I at first thought the sectioning off would take away from this but it didn't hurt it at all. I felt emotion and I felt realness. U hit the topic very well. Only thing I think u need is vocab and not just throwing big words in but doing what u did there with better rhyme schemes and more griping vocab.
Witty...dope dope dope. Excellent imagery and rhyme scheme. I felt bad for old boy, for real. Losing my wife would devastate me. This hit home to me. I know he should of took her time with him and her memorys as like a inspiration but easier said then done.
Vote....WITTY....for the more powerful piece. No good keep at it bro cause that was a great first read from u....
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