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Old 03-18-2013, 12:24 PM   #13
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Mac I've read somewhere before that english isn't your first language and I can tell that now no offense intented. But the wording was fucked in a number of areas in this piece which in turn fucked up the flow, which in turn fucked up the message you were trying to get across. I respect the content of this piece but just practice your wording and everything else will fall into place holmes.
patrown you came with what you had to come with this week to get the win and you had enough. I wasn't overly impressed with the content of your piece but the flow was top notch and it was enough to garner you the W.

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