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Old 03-18-2013, 11:32 AM   #12
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Mac - you had the potential to bring a real dope verse. Had you included some mechanics and whatnot it wouldve been more interesting to read. Given what you wrote, I found it ok, but lacked cadence and that fluid flow. A lot of long sentances to end rhymes. Decent, but not mind blowing.

Pat - you had a more cohesive flow, which made it easy to read and follow. story was good as well, littered with some dope rhymes. I felt this attributed to you winning this week. Just a stronger showing imo.


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