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Old 03-18-2013, 11:22 AM   #1
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fuckers... this was diffcult to vote on.
ok ok ok..

Adonis - loved the way you wrote this. very poetic. your flow and cadence was well written out on this. your vocabulary on this piece was perfect. some of my fav lines were.

"..He tucks me in, my cheeks press his lips,
this isn't earth, it's proof that heaven exists.."

and

"..My physical's tarnished, my emotions are baggage,
I try to take flight, but I'm a victim of habit.."

I just loved how those came across.. well done.

Mike Wrecka - Nice storytelling! you had some vivid imagery on this forreal. flow was nice, however it didn't pack the same cadence type of punch that adonis' had. However it wasn't completely required. you told a great little story here.


overall a hard battle to vote on. and Id say respectively this could be BOTW, both had good stories flow and all that jazz, so it came down to personal taste. With that said I enjoyed Mike's a bit more in the end. pretty dope tho. props to both.

V/ Mike Wrecka
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