Vulgar- You are a monster. You are in a peak form(Relative, obviously) and you really put some solid work into this PSA. I love the perspective take on the topic. This was a mix of a punch in the face with a little tongue in cheek. Very well written with top tier execution (again, relative). Great job.
Frank- I really liked how you took a cliche angle and revamped it into a battle cry of revolution for the underdog. This is a FRANK verse. This content explains what I feel you represent. The conviction was there. The story was told with great pacing, and the voice was very consistent and solid. Your rhyming was seemingly Vulgar's equal imo. I feel like this was a powerful piece and even though you had the visual aid, it was unnecessary. Great Job.
You two really dropped balls on this piece. Hit the ground running and impressed me thoroughly. I feel like I'd be shitting on one to pick the other, but one guy has to win.
MVGT Frank. THough both were great, the tongue in cheek skepticism angle can't beat revolutionary empowerment!! That wasn't very funny. :(
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