[Adonis]

Time, you wrote a decent enough verse,but I have no clue what the beginning was as you started off as a woman maybe kyle's mom, and then bang, your the father. The only plausible explanation would be you were the mom, son was kicked out and dad now wanted to arrest him. IDK bro, stretch in that front, too vague maybe, or just not a strong grasp on characters, or to many characters.

Ziggie you made an error. "he still knew he still knew", human after all my friend,proof. This verse, much like the other two I read this season, are subpar to your standards. The message was received though..... If all human share the same goals, I.e improvement of life, happiness, bettering the world in general while simply striving to be shining examples rather than what we are, then the common goal would be met easily, and easier if we all worked at it.


Vote. Ziggie.