good battle
Adonis - you brought a verse written to the beat and theme of the song Airplanes. the writing was cool and would have fit the beat well. would sound really good when spit. which is dope. BUT you piggy backed someone elses idea and just expanded on it. which is not the end of the world, I have done adaptions of published work before myself. but this just felt too much like the original, kind of uninspired if you will. also I feel like it was such a bland direction to take that topic picture. tbh the verse didn't do much for me. I was bored. don't take it the wrong way man. you are one of my fav writers in this league even though the last few weeks my votes don't show that. probably one of the top three pieces I have read in the AOWL Season 1-3 was that piece you wrote about the ant. go back in that direction holmes.
YDK - this was a dope story. I like how you really examined the pic. I didn't notice the plane was a drone, but then I read yours and zoomed in and ya it is. I also really really liked the little touch you made with the kid being carried because he is partially crippled. that struck me. I thought the rhyming and word play was dope.
before they succumbed to the endless enslavement.
I like two words starting with the same letter in a row for some odd reason.
good story, I was engaged and I felt like the ending was appropriate and well timed.
Vote - YDK
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