This is very good. Sometimes the ridiculous complexity of your rhyme scheme can make for awkward wording, but it's never too bad. I read this as being meant for a slower performance, but it could work both ways. The carried-over rhymes were the highlight. None of it made me outright laugh, but there were plenty of clever moments.
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