i don't know what it was about this but i think i liked it. i think it was just really original, and didn't seem forced to me. like u had some kindof weird concepts/punches but they were definitely different. it was cool to see someone just write something that was pretty real to them, u didn't try to be something ur not kinda thing. the rhyming was a little weak in some spots, better in others. you have potential. the vocab and content was interesting for the most part, although the structuring and setup of the verse could use a little work. 29 posts, new guy yeah? you'll get better as long as u keep reading/feeding other ppls work and keep posting ur own. Canada EH? where?? I'm in Calgary
haha, word kool keith will do that to u.
check my open mic and tell me what u think
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My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.
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