[patrown]

frank - tbh, i didn't really feel statisfied with the body of it.
although an all inclusive verse is admirable, they weren't cohesive enough to paint a single picture i was satisfied with as a stand alone. .. kinda out there. pretty sick though. going to be a tough call cuz it sounded fucking great. favorite set..

Guns banging in the boonies, The drums never stop beating in your head
Everywhere you go, you hear the drums and sound of feet being mislead
The sequence of events repeats; repeating, the scene repeats at a speed that's intense.
Freeze on the fence as the mythical creature reads - reaching for his specks.

ink - evil set...
Where is my son?! I feel around, finding only gravel and twigs
The hiss of a snake fizzles out, and then the napalm hits
Burns the oxygen from the air, steaks scramble on the frying pan
Trying to escape ground zero, flesh melting off my hands

just hit hard. melted fresh and cereal.. mmmmm. nasty. built up to that point well. but you ended it in the air. i'm not really sure how i feel about that. lots of great stuff building up to an apex i'm not truly satisfied with. perhaps closer and return could have been matched up.. that would have really connected the dots, if you will........

/v ink - a little more coherent. this was a very tough call for me, but overall.. i felt like ink's piece was a little more complete. if Frank had reigned in the skills for a more solid plot, he would've won much easier. but ink made more sense to me, so he gets my vote. hard decision though. good battle, thanks to both.