[Adonis]

Frank - Disconencted Blurb of thoughts meant to read as such, but ironically there is just too much going on here. I notice all topics, but even that just are words placed in a verse covering up what is not truly a good topic of choice. I mean you wrote about a highschool kid seeing shit smoking for the first time. Not only un-original but I also didn't think it was done with your typical skill level. I know reading your shit over the seasons I come across the rare verse that I term whack, only about once a season. Good thing you got it out the way now. Only week one was bellow par as well, get that flame back nucka. I mean bitch.


Ink - The smoke chokes my eyes until my vision cannot breathe....I see what you did, but i still don't like word choices. I felt the emotion, and loved the imagery. Vivid and twisted, fairly descriptive and very effective. Enjoyed the ending as it showed the bond clearly. Solid verse brother. Not a top ten of yours, but better a lot of topicalists.


V/Ink