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Old 03-16-2014, 01:06 AM   #6
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Vulgar's lighthearted fast paced tone was excellent and a complete contrast to Adonis more serious slower one. Stylistically, both were different yet equal. Connection to the topic from Adonis was a bit tangential, which is alright, I interpreted it as a kind of discussion about delusional disorder disguised as a Jack the Ripper story. I don't know where the aspect of drums beating in the head comes into it other than maybe you are comparing the psychosis aspect with the chaos of never ending drum beats? It's a little bit muddled, but can't hold it too much against it, since the other aspects to back up your theme were excellent. Vulgar's effort here was very direct, enjoyed the sudden progression in the last half into the kind of paranoia/conspiracy theory part, it was an excellent juxtaposition with the beginning comedic description with the broom. Very interesting overall. Voting for Vulgar.
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