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Old 03-15-2014, 10:59 AM   #5
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Frank, tbh honest I respect the effort of trying to cram all the topics into one but imo it just didnt make sense. Like tbh I didnt know what the fuck you were writing about. I mean it sounded good and you are a hell of a writer, no doubt about it but I mean the story was just all bbc.co over the place. Again respect on using all topics and you mechanical approach but it just didnt do it for me this week and I pretty much always vote for you


Ink, I really dug the story man, very very sldescriptive. The beginning almost felt like the end of the childhood movie bambi haha well until the character dropped the baby. I loved the cereal line with the milk changing color too. The olny part I didnt like was the ending. I thought you could have closed it better but that just nitpicking.

Both great writers but surprisingly im going to go with ink on the one for a more complete, polished piece imo

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