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Old 03-15-2014, 12:20 AM   #5
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This short contest was great from both competitors. Cyp her had a good direct use of language but slacked a little in the mechanics of multiple rhyme etc. Not normally a problem, but it did not compare well against Zenlands advanced display. Good use of emotion but some repetitions of words like cry/crying/cries was not perhaps effective or particularly good at capturing the power of the emotions felt. Zenland's submission had a light quality, beginning with 'Nouns are just sounds.' but moving to a more philosophical part later on 'This is empty. I've written this, but YOU make the meaning.' - kind of a take on Vygotsky and theories where language meanings are shaped by the social/cultural experiences people attach to them. Would have made for a good starting point for an extended discussion, but it was a good display of Bushido code to keep it short. Voting for Zenland.
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