This was just okay. A few of the rhymes were forced and the content felt generic in both a narrow and broad sense. The lines themselves were pretty cliche-ridden and the overall approach wasn't very nuanced. If this is a personal piece I suppose the critique is different, but not really. It felt like a topical, but either way this could've been improved with some complexity in both execution and concept.
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Last edited by Geno; 03-15-2014 at 03:25 AM.
Reason: sorry bout the edit, cake. meant to qoute and fucked up so had to restore your original. didnt mean it
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