First half, wasn't really feeling much in terms of content. The unclearity had it come across (to me) as rhymes for the sake of rhymes. The oceans bottle portion was a dope one liner and things started improving after that, you began building on concepts and sayin some shit. Two complains, would like to have seen you gone deeper concept wise, and not wasted lines in the beginning that weren't really build upon and did little to elevate the verse. Secondly, and technically speaking, the repetition of rhyming words seemed a little excessive. happens mate/grave/happenins sake are examples at a quick glance but it was very noticable especially taking into consideration the limited size of the verse. Deff some strong points though, a verse on par with the caliber as the oceans bottle line that stays on topic would make for a tight verse.
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