Vivid, you took a very interesting approach here going with a full blown story with a lot of dialogue and I must say, each read I came away impressed. You've always been one of the better storytellers in this league and this piece proves that. Your schemes were nice, the first part really drew me in. The dialogue was done very well too. There isn't much I can say negatively. The breaking up of your verse would be my only knack, but even then, I believe it made sense in your presentation. Mike Wrecka, it's been awhile since I've read something from you that displayed some top tier potential, and this here woyld have to be a step up (I had been gone awhile so idk about any of your work during that time). The direction you took was deep, dark and personal. You wrote this with that same tone from start to finsh. Your piece flowed very well and that helped as well.
This is a classic story vs conceptual match up. You both did a great job in your own unique way. This was a close match. Both of you didn't really have any major issues imo. One difficult thing about this sort of match between two different approaches, is usually a story has a bit of leverage especially when it's executed well. I got to tip ky hat to Mike for sprinkling some life into his piece especially on a personal level. Vivid had great dialogue and told a comical but very well rounded story. The intrigue and direction in Vivids story draws the line for me here.
MVGT: Vividlyvague.
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