[Ink]

Objective: I think you did the storytelling well. It seemed to slowly build up to a climax - but sadly there was none to be had. The way you ended it felt really weak, almost cheap, and the bulk of that feeling came from you basically using the topic as a line in your verse. You did a great job taking us on a journey, only to stop at a point where there was no scenic view, no monument or anything, and then say "alright this is it. lets turn around and go back." There was alot of potential that wasn't realized in this verse imo

sacrifice: This verse surprised me, in that after I just skimmed through it initially, I thought it'd be a topical without much more than some commentary on the topic.. You introduced us to your character well, drawing us into the perspective of a drugee. Your introduction to the female and how she leads him back down the path of drug abuse was smartly done. The verse read pretty slick as well..

vote: sacrifice. His take on the topic was more inventive and better constructed