Objective began very well. Barcelona and that Catalonia region in general is known as a hotbed of anarcho-revolution throughout history, so it was very apt to set your revolutionary tale there. More could have been done in the beginning to set the scene for the revolution. These are the protagonists it would have been nice to give them some more motivation. You had a lot of ideas to draw from particularly actual history of Revolutionary Catalonia, where their motivations were mass killings, Franco, unemployment and a population full of laborers. You needed to show this kind of perfect storm, it's a big thing and you kind of just jumped into it. The protest scenes were described well and the main character was portrayed very sympathetically. I feel the story lacked a strong antagonist, perhaps a dictator-like figure would have been a good addition. In both history and in fiction (stories like 1984 etc) there is some individual, group or institution to focus the revolution against. Perhaps that is the biggest issue here. Sacrifice had a good discussion of relapse, incorporating the concept behind the word revolution to comment on the cyclical nature of substance use and relapse was great. Just like a revolution the wheel keeps on spinning but if it fails then it's back to how things were before. Perhaps even the last line with the mention of 'disease' is a nod to those kind of 12-step programs, it was all very well put together and thought out. Voting for Sacrifice.
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