On my phone so the vote may be brief.
Adonis: It wasn't until about halfway through the verse I realized you were talking about Diode cuz I'm stoopid. Once that became clear I enjoyed this. Those subtle jabs were nicely done and the closing section was imo the strongest. Nice, funny verse.
Diode: Well crafted piece here. There were some lines which flowed together nicely through subtle use of alliteration. Whether that was intended of not I don't know, but it worked beautifully. The premise of this also great although a bit cliche, but your unique wording and style made it seem original.
Close battle. At first I was thinking Adonis, but after a second read I got Diode.
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