[Adonis]

Ziggie - Decent verse. It was a straight forward story, not the usual twist you add. The only twist I guess is Soviets won the race, but that was in the title. After reading the title, I was rather excited to see where you took this, but you merely wrote of the issues they had with craft and how this dude with wife and kid fixed them, not too exciting bruhv.

Oats - Dope concept bro. I liked each stanza and the use of metaphors, the progression, the movement of birth-living-death. Entire verse was a story, from start to end was captivating and intriguing, even more so on second read and beyond which honestly is rare. First stanza had many concepts on what makes the birth easier for child, and potentially enhances the witt of said child, also loved the fact that you kept the focus on child and never once mentioned too much of any one single character beyond a line or two. second stanza was of traits being served as a dinner in a buffet line, dope concept here. Then he had his own seed, and death. Legacy was the key here, and his left nicely.


V/ Oats

Overall had the better written verse and concept, just extremely captivating here. Should be one of the top verses of the season.