Zyg, another dope read here. Imagery was on point as always. Flow seemed to be more inserted here than previous pieces I’ve read from you. Your approach to the concept was cool, I just wish it had more to it. More details in the beginning would’ve added more suspense to the story imo. It all seemed kind of sudden how everything came about as it narrowed down to moon landing. Other than that it was a good read and I enjoyed it.
Oats, loved the take on the topic you took on this bringing focus to the adaptation to this world from young to old. Was cool how you used education as a focal point here, showing that without it, life won’t work out so well. The ending was too rushed, imo. Flow could’ve been better at times but it was never off that much. Overall good shit oats.
Got oats taking this for a more complete read, felt if zyg would’ve added another 10 lines or so in his, he could’ve had it. Good shit from both though, could go either way possibly.
v. Oats
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