objective - reads easy, great story, probably true. sounds true to me. believable anyway. oh holy shit you killed it. you really fucking killed it. nailed the topic head on. great story too, btw. really had my attention. i'm not sure if saying "yeeeeeet," is common in Spain, but it had an authentic feel to it. my only advice is to try and match up some sounds at end of lines in the beginnings of lines or perhaps throw in more multiples. although you were very to the point, it would just sound a little better. (i.e. vowel sounds and softer consants transition well)
sacrifice - siick. nice flow. definitely a song. real catchy, would sound very good recorded. really like how you rhymed atrophied will with after these pills. reads very smooth. you would have benefited from a little bit more coherence. weaving a kind of "revolution" theme throughout with word choices or phrase tones would have been more beneficial then chorus inclusion, as you chose.
/v objective - i think objective won this battle because he killed the topic. after that series of events, in the life of a revolutionary, i mean.. that kid will never forget his father saying that. it takes a good story teller to take it against a smooth piece like sacrifices, so this was a great match. thanks to both.
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