[Lars]

Fresh - You have this great ability for pulling off multi-strings while still keeping your bars short enough in length that the flow doesn't faulter, that's a major plus of yours, so don't change it. Play to your strengths. I wrote a lot similarly at one point so from a technical standpoint, I can appreciate what you're doing, and I actually thought you ended this on a strong note it was just that you made this thing so brief it almost sold yourself a little short. I think given more time to develop this into something longer and fleshed it out, it could have served you better, but as it is you almost seemed to be in a rush or ran out of time or clipped the ending short to wrap it up. Your rhyming and scheming is top notch though, not many here can keep it as rigid as you do yet still maintain that buttery flow from one line to the next.

Pinot Grij - I've always loved your style, it suits topical writing to a tee, it's technical enough to give the readers what they want, yet you still keep the schemes etc loose enough so that you've plenty of wriggle-room to navigate us through the story without it seeming overbearing and it comes off effortlessly. I was with you from the jump on this verse, completely drawn into the story of these two as young lovers, then it reached crisis point which is somewhere we've all been at some point and can relate too. That's a great asset in writing I always feel, finding that universal thing that we can all relate to on some emotional level and then building around it. This verse showcased just how dangerous you can be when you're fired up. I expect big things from you this season. I'm going with Pinot Grij here also, I just felt he was better in more areas overall and delivered a more full-rounded drop this week than Fresh who's joint seemed a little short if I'm honest. Nice battle guys.

Keep those pens moving!