A white Gi cloaked by black waist.
The belt won't expose the sheath my ass gapes.
Fists of furry. Rarely weary.
Defined deltoids. Hairless clearly.
This ain't a race, if it were, I'm of melting pot.
Irish-German vermin with a teeny Celtic cock.
Lol this whole section had me laughing, the one after it was solid too. This seemed like a really fun piece and its nice to see someone just have fun and write for a change. I do however think this might have been more fit for the OM than the AWOL because even though I did enjoy it, it felt lacking a bit for me.
Doide,
I don't know man. You suprise me sometimes. Like I really didnt like your piece last week but then read your battle with fresh (which was a pretty stellar piece) and then this one. I didnt really like your first section but the 2nd on till the closer was just beautifully written. I see improvements every week from you (as well as eveyone else including myself) keep it up.
This was a difficult decision. I really enjoyed both pieces but I just feel like the effort from diide made me lean more toqards his verse this week. Really dope battle guys. Im looking forward to reading more from both of you. Thanks for the great reads.
Mvgt=Diode
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