JW, this was a dope story all around that was well told, and with minimal filler. Only things Id have to get on you about would be your basic display of rhyme schemes for the most part, and just felt there could’ve been more suspense, particularly in the middle verse, that would lead up to the end. But that’s just me nitpicking shit. This was dope man I enjoyed it a lot.
EP, if this were a battle of concepts, you would have it hands down. I loved the horror type of emotion in the end, but I just wish it was all displayed better. Seems you rushed it a little. Flow was adrift at times, but overall not bad.
This is a close one for me. I originally had JW, then a second read I got Pancake. Pancake had a great mix of comedy/horror in his verse, horror might not be the right word to describe it but it’ll do. Just Write never bored me, his story was on point. Whereas, Pancake did bore me, until the last verse that is. Pancake had the creativity, but I have to give it to JW for being more of an enjoyable story to read.
v. Just Write
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