This is take two: I dug this drop from a urban gamer's perspective. All the grit that should be in a story based video-game-to-crime-movie adaptation in rhyme format was present. From a writer's perspective, nothing special jumped out content-wise aside from your consistent, albeit rigid, rhyme structure. For an (almost) advocate against rhyming altogether(ironically), I can still appreciate when a flow is done right. Great job overall. This was good for what it was. I look forward to reading more drops in your style.
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