Jesus @ the tags. I'm not a topical person, but I do know high level topical when I read it. This is sort of like the Winter Topical final that is being done now. But, not to be offensive, those writers are a bit higher tier than what is shown here. Atleast from one of the verses. I finally understand what people mean by diodes writing (which I never really liked). And for the first time in a while, I read both of the votes to fully digest what they saw and what I saw. And it's unfortunate really. Both of these verses are good. Freshs verse is easier to digest and is akin to (lars) in the final now. Not comparing him to lars, but just doing a comparative gesture between two different battles and styles employed by all four and how they're relative to one unique opponent to the other. Fresh employed a simple story, outright and straight at you. The mechanics werent as bad as I thought they would be (I read something from fresh and didn't really like it, and thought it could be touched upon) In no way is he a bad writer. This verse was nice, and it had a perpetual feeling to it. Never did I sway off and not understand or fully grasp a notion of a particular line. Everything fit together pretty compact and it was delivered quite well. My onlynick at this, is the mechanics in it overall - Though I did say they were above what I thought you were capable of, I still saw a few flaws in wording. I also saw this in some of diodes as well, though I shouldnt be talking as some of my lines are usually longer and shorter, and I can take into count accent and enunciation - I think diodes was much smoother by reading it. It wasnt landslide as fresh really expressed rhythmic value here and came with the goods. The underlined theme was okay and the connection to the picture was cool, it was almost too cool. What I mean by that was that, there was no real creative outburst or imagery, aside from the fact of the story itself, the correlation between picture and writing was far-fetched and sorry to say - almost mediocre. The link between mechanics was indeed well done. Diodes I read 3 times. Basically because it had more to understand, I think. The correlation was very well done, and the whole mural about chalk and a over achieving, maniacal misunderstood young man is just awesome as the picture is indeed in chalk. The ending wasn't abrupt, and I thought it was absolutely stellar. the first time I read something of diodes and actually grasped a full verse. And its so subtle how each paragraph is almost a chronological fast forward into the young mans life, from praised to corrupt to damaged - it was very tightly wound and absolutely leaves a lot to the reader, well not a lot - but the ending can be interpreted in so many ways, but its special in the way that it isnt complicated. Similar to dead mans verse, his complications dont stem from an intricate story but how he compiles the story through mechanics as well. Which is a good comparison. Freshs story is more like lars where he's telling you a story as hes imagining without subtle metaphors and imagery. Except in this department @
Lars delivers a top tier image where as fresh here delivered a mid tier - not to say it was bad, it was very good and it was impressive. But Diodes story and overall pitch was just better to me. A good battle, but a clear winner. Good luck gentlemen. Thanks for the read.