I was just waiting to see how this panned out before I voted. I re-read only twice, but first time around I had a clear winner. The second time around, I had a clear winner again. Not to say the other verse wasn't as pronounced as it could have been. Which- is the case, I think. But one verse stood out and connected with me better. It actually likened my odds of leaning towards that sort of verse. If I had to take a gander at what I would be writing for this particular picture I would definitely take some sort of route this writer showed. Except I would make it a million times better cause I'm feeling that creative urge and I have the time to do so now. Lets start with the latter poster.
Dead man. Excellent verse. I wouldnt compare this to any other writings youve shared with us for a few reasons. It had its own individual discourse. I liked the element of writing surrounding the storyline of the greater being. The outlining relationship through tiny chapters of repeated wordage to signify the premise, climax and fall is really well done. I used a similar format against ZYG and it panned out pretty well, though you voted in likes of the opponent who used a style also incorporated into this verse, except with much less dialogue. Exquisite. Your mechanics for the first time this tournament actually met a similar opponent with equally serrated blades; that is lars. Kind of a treat to see. Your ability to construct a verse in terms of mechanics and wording (lets exclude rhymes for a bit here) is actually very good. Lars uses a set that actually amplifies his wording through his rhymes, a feat that is very hard to do and only few on this site can do it. Not even the top tiers that come to mind can combine storytelling and wordage as good as lars, or even close to his level. Which is impressive. You are probably one of the other writers that can do so and quite adequately. To see you two go at it, is quite a treat for myself. It's like a guru watching two of his top students go at it from different regions. I am that guru and you two are my students. I didn't really see anybody really giving deadman a problem until now. I mean, I faced him but that was just a badly timed hadouken meant to hit no one. Deadman easily dodged it and moved on to the next round. Witty had his moments, but deadman disposed of him. Nigma did well, but had little success. And in the final match a master swordsman approaches with his sword cuffed into his guard, ready to sheave at a moments notice. Deadman doesnt notice at the quick slash near his cheek but is quickly put on guard knowing this isnt an easy battle to take forth. Lars is equally confident and talented. I find it funny some people (one person) put such a far distance between deadmans talent of weaponry and lars knowledge of it. When in reality, in this context, it is very close, and the tides can shift at a moments notice.
Lars told a story. The profundity of it, was ok, and it ended quite profound. I wish he STARTED with what he ended with. I was thinking something along the lines of interstellar. And my juices are just bubbling, actually mad at myself for not showing completely in my battle. This tournament just caters to me if Im motivated enough to do so. Lars delivers a piece about humanity and it is punctuated with his ease of access to a readers heart strings. The picture couples quite well with what is being said, "it was right in our hands." And it touches deeply for what we are in now, known as a sort of bubbling crisis. The fossil fuel ref, the expendable energy, everything is beautifully written and the cosmos align. It reminds me of the trailer for interstellar, and that trailer just touches beautifully for me. I posted a thread long ago about it and nobody really cared and they made fun of my wording in it. Hopefully your subconscious took note of that and catered to me, because I liked this verse very much.
"we always define ourselves by our ability to overcome the impossible"
one critic said it was impossible for lars to outwrite deadman (loosely translated). I think that critic was wrong. And for once in this tournament, an outright vote will be casted at the end of my vote. Vote - Lars. Exceptional work by both gentlemen. Whoever loses, will still be an exceptional writer, the winner will be as well. Good luck. Fuck, I'm crying. I'd like to thank my mom and mustachia. I can't *walks off stage*