lol. i didnt think his verse was bad. your ego is unsettling though. You had some weird wording. Great, even the best writers do at times. I think you need to learn to be more humble, and understanding. If you think zen is beneath you in writing and are offended by his commentary, why should you? If hes obviously not as good as you, what difference does it make? Respect is earned, really. And if someone better than you gives you the same criticism, you arent offended correct? Well you know why? Cause their respect was earned. You respect them as a writer. Lol. It's all clear in writing here. Now I'm better than you, and Im commending you for this piece. It was clear, but my only complaint (other than the wording) which really isnt a complaint, is the unclear, and almost unfocused topic or subject you may deliver each line. The mechanics are clearly there, and you arent new at this. It's good. Keep it up. And I doubt you'd beat Vulgar, but prove me wrong. See how me and Pancake flocked to say that you wouldnt beat him? That's the respect hes earned, not the respect that is automatically given to him. Learn some from a baby mawfucka. Thread closed. Thanks. And if you dont accept this criticism touching all points of argument, I will ether you worse than hush, worse than vulgar, and you'll regret not making me a buddy of yours. @
El Pancake close this. No more. Re-open when you comment other pieces.