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Old 03-05-2014, 08:24 AM   #2
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Hello Vivid. There was some very nice use of language used throughout this piece. They were subtle but there for a purpose and I dug that. The "solely focus on large shoes" was an example of what I mean. It's clever writing. You laid down the foundation of what you wanted, and for such a short piece it was enjoyable. Well done.
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