Just read it and 'lead guy' does indeed stick out as bad wording. Throughout the piece you used elegant and regal language so to say lead guy is a bit too slangy. It goes against the tone you set and is only there to rhyme. You should have reworded either lead guy or the rhyme to accommodate a smoother and more consistent read.
It was a solid piece but being rustled over an honest and fair criticism of just one phrase paints you as someone who thinks their shit doesn't stink. Its no way to be. You're not the best writer here nor are you above reproach. It'd be better to take good feedback, which Zenland gave, and consider it instead of arguing.
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