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Originally Posted by Saila

But he isn't a prize. They didn't win him. If anything, he 'won' the right to lead the pack.
And 'elite' refers to a superior group or organization of people. He's neither or. Not to mention the extra syllable at the start of 'elite', fucks up the flow.

If you'd of written this, and used the replacement you just gave, I'd of fed it and said, "that nonsensical set of words you just strung together there for the sake of rhyming, ruined that bar" That's what I'd of said.
See, I don't mind constructive criticism - but being pedantic about two words you clearly can't improve on yourself - I do mind.

Thanks for (evidently) giving enough of a fuck to make it an issue though. It's greatly appreciated.