Bender
First line was ok. Decent clowning hit, and I'm assuming he moans about voters? I'm new here so will have to get up to scratch on where these personals come from. I liked the idea behind the next bar, although if 5-10 is an average score here, that's pretty shit. Actually, vet shit. Still though, tidy hit. Next bar was ok-ish. Felt like you coulda utilized the Strikta aids thing better, but having said that, I inly just caught the thread so dunno how much that play has been murdered (or not). Blood & Some rhymed weak for me. Yea it's a near rhyme and all that jazz, but it just didn't come off right for me. Last 2 bars were horrible. They looked extremely weak in contrast to your previous bars, and it was like you lost the will to finish strong.
Destroyer
Weak opener. Benders Strikta bar wasn't that good, but you just made it look much better. Wasn't keen on the multi whatsoever. Next bar was soft. And your set up made little sense, so just came off as filler. Next bar wasn't any better, and it wasn't until your NEXT bar that I knew you were tryna take a shot at his age. That ain't good, cuz it makes the previous bar look wasted. Next bar again, still no improvement. How is telling him to find a loving relationship gonna hurt him? It's not a hit, and it was another waste of 2 lines. Closer had a bit of relatable content, but again, not strong enough to act as the nail in his coffin.
Bender, verse was alright other than the closing 2 bars.
Destroyer, I was left after every line, hoping it'd pick up.. but it didn't.
MVGT Bender
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