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Old 03-03-2014, 10:48 AM   #14
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Damn very well written. I was feeling this from top to bottom. Very descriptive writing and you maintained a steady flow throughout.

"Bet’ pursued it to aid him, lengthened his stride,
with no clue what awaited and his chest filled with pride.
He swept at the vines that appeared in his path
expecting to find a clearing at last.
When the searing impact of a blade struck in his chest
hand-engineered from a flat stone, just like the hunter possessed."---loved this part rite here

great drop
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