YDK- Fucking cool. A bit rhymey (not a word, to be obv), but it merely straddled that line, as it was well written, albeit one odd rhyme transition (alone, atone for). Vocabulary was a step up and your overall setup was pretty nice. The last few lines were pretty killer, though great lines were littered throughout imo. Good job bro.
Ink- if this was a biographical retelling during the booms of early American immigration, this would truly be a cool piece. This was an unassuming drop on the face of it, but when you dive in, it tells an involved and relevant story. The first two lines of the second verse really urked me though. Ugh. Great drop overall.
All in all, both of you dove into this topic headfirst. I liked both verses, but opted for the better imagery and intimate account. MVGT Ink.
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