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Old 03-03-2014, 02:17 AM   #16
dyedinthewool
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Wza- your content was strong and your diction was good and I am sure that with a tighter flow you could have developed a greater impact. I enjoyed your verse, and while it was not story like, like that of your opponent, you still managed to bring your point across. I believe the only aspect of your topical I wish improved is technicality.

Clock- you chose a different route than that of your opponent, you certainly have storytelling down, and I read this only to realize that the piece feels a tad bit unfinished or rushed per say? I say that because like in my battle, I could have done so much more and I didn’t (for me it was lack of time). Your flow was a lot cleaner than your opponents and you filled me with suspense towards the end. A minor let down however because I feel that after some polishing, your piece could have been excellent.

This battle is one of those battles where you choose one for what the other didn’t bring to the table but you both had hits and misses, so for enjoyment alone I’m going to vote for clockwerk
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