YDK
'Put yourself first but never put your enemy second,
because every second beckons when an entity threatens'
'More importantly it brings you back to the start,
Where life and death burn using hope as a spark'
Awesume verse, the multis used worked fantastic and
made for a somewhat rapid read, the content was very
dark and morbid which worked great, gave it that hellish
tone which one would associate with dead souls. nice job
INK
'He stepped out, prepared for many nights with midnight oils
With a fair wife, in any light, she'd make passions boil'
'Backlogged, he slaved away, his wife entered the fray
Her pretty hands now calloused, as talks of children fade'
Beautiful piece here, your use of metaphors really stoodout well and very
creative. I wasnt keen on the start of your piece, well the captains speech
to be precise, but other than that the story gripped me and made for a top notch
read.
Overall I find this very hard to vote, but in this instance I preferred the story
approach that little bit more, great match here guys
Vote - INK
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