Neutral: What I enjoyed most about this piece was your rhyme placement and how the piece seemed almost ever-evolving with the rhyme scheme used, it showed a deft touch and great pen game. It almost reminded me of English who posts here in that respect, it can come off effortless but there's really a lot of time spent behind the scenes here. you keep it understated, but I can fully appreciate what you did from a technical standpoint. I honestly didn't see too much of the connection here, though, maybe I missed it and I'm the idiot for not understanding? I don't know, your writing is crisp, wording is great, there's a lot to like about this it just didn't seem to tie in with the topic, for me at least.
Diode - I love Breaking Bad, my spanish isn't on point but my Spanglish is and there wasn't enough of it to give me any real trouble understanding what was going on as I read through like it was for some voters, it wasn't a big deal IMHO. It was a cool tie-in to something I loved watching, a nice angle with the topic, and the characters were relatable as I was already familiar with them if that makes sense? I suppose in one sense that means you didn't have to do as much character-develop wise but that's really just picking fault.
Diode did more than enough to get this.
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