This was interesting, I liked the topic of the piece for sure. At first it was kind of hard to understand what you were saying but then about half way through it was clear to me. I feel like there was alot of big words and although the flow was good it made it difficult for me to read it and really get into it but then again I am not a big topical writer and prefer ease of reading over complexity. It was interesting and towards the end I was kind of thinking that you were talking more about a sexual rendition of the forbidden fruit, am I mistaken by this ? It would have put a really cool twist on it to see that concept really played up.
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