[Frank]

vulgar

sterile scientist suit type of verse. you have one word that nearly ruined your focused narrative, this being the cornipicus line. that line was more of train of thought with your usual universally 'referenecy' way of writing. you almost had a cohesive piece here - coherent in singular theme. that line was so powerfully out of place that it almost divided the piece though. overall, aside from that one line, i found this piece eerily written. i finished reading feeling probed by tentacles of higher intelligence. i noticed your attention to transitions really paid off for you in the flow department. well done. enjoyed the read -

king ra

as always, epic. your epic presentation skills somewhat out-shine your actual content most of the time. in terms of pure presentation skills, you're top 5 on netcees, without a doubt. your arrangement is wonderfully mapped out, over the top grandeur. this piece wasn't particularly written all that well. a lot of simple wording/schemes. your gift and talent lies in organization and presentation. if you can take that and hone it to an even higher level, your pieces will stand up to better written pieces simply because of entertainment value.

vote goes to vulgar

good battle to open up the season here.