ok cool battle. enjoyed it
ZYG - really sick verse. it was top notch. it flowed very well and was a fine example of tongue in cheek satire. it could have been a segment on the daily show or something. good end rhymes as well. not always using the obvious choice. a fantastic verse. BUT and this is a big but to me, I don't like the way this verse relates to the topic. you could have had this verse written to post in the OM and added the last line on to try and make it fit. I don't see the strong correlation.
Exo - this verse was good. not great. it reads slightly basic. and I cant figure out why. I mean you used multis. but it just doesn't seem like a very complex rhyme scheme at all. the story itself was good. it was interesting enough. I really liked the connection to the topic. that is where you excelled. I really strong concept. the execution lacked a tad though.
ok two verses one amazing the other was good. but one hit the topic on the head while the other one, at least for me didn't. I cant believe im typing this but im going with the better concept over execution here.
vote - exo
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